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Old Oct 21, 2007, 07:45 PM // 19:45   #301
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the board thing is actually part of a carriage I'm hiding behind. it might not have turned out that well, but it was carefully planned - Eryn was meant to be half hidden in order to appear as if she's just sneaked up to Rumpelstiltskin. the person in the back is there on purpose too, it's supposed to represent the hunter that originally overheard rumpelstiltskin. the queen isn't even supposed to be in this shot, however I thought this the most remarkable scene of the märchen and interpreted it with a little more freedom. and third, the brightness of my dress. again, this is probably due to 'bad' light conditions, but I don't think I have armor that would be less white - plus, Eryn's supposed to be a queen, I wanted to bear that in mind. the elf is dancing, even if it doesn't look like it.
I don't want to seem /pout-ing all over the place, but just to show you I do think about my shots
Whoa, thats some awesome concepts. However, reading your description and looking at your picture sparked a light bulb! I agree with you that sometimes it's hard to show your thoughts in your shot, but likewise, I guess you can't expect people to see your "thoughts" if your image isn't a clear translation of your thoughts.

I really like the idea of sneaking behind the carriage is clever, but looking at the picture, it really doesn't like a cart? As well, 85% of your body is evident, which really doesn't suggest the sneaking you intended. And like you said, you couldn't try to camouflage Eryn into the background (because of dye issues, and the queen character), so why not try and hide your body more behind the "cart," and use /doubletake to pop your head out. Many different ways to execute your idea.

Secondly, like you yourself said, "the elf is dancing even if he doesn't look like it." If he doesn't look like he's dancing, then who would know apart from you? It's great you knew, but unfortunately even I didn't until your telling us.

Lastly, the hunter is a great touch! I totally remember that part from the story. But again, the hunter is just standing there with no reaction from the elf, or any sort of action himself. He's just there without justification from the image. It's great you justify it now, but the image should be able to speak for itself as well.

You have some of the best shots in this competition, and clearly you're a smart human. I had that problem too all the way back in TNTM when I was "heady," "over thinking stuff" and probably my worst crime was that I didn't always translate my thoughts into the image. Don't fall into the same trap I did!
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Old Oct 21, 2007, 09:17 PM // 21:17   #302
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Assignment #8 "Author Anyone?"

Congratulations to you five girls. You've made it this far into the competition. You started with twelve of you, now after seven of you have been eliminated, here is where we stand. Five gorgeous girls, all wanting to be Tyria's Top Superstar, and you've all shown what you can do image wise, but now for a new twist.

Many superstars make up their own things as they progress along in their careers. Some write music, some write books, or other things. This week, you guys will be doing the same exact thing. We're going to have you write. About what you may ask? Well, if you all remember your Application assignment (which was choose your favorite location, and tell us about it), then you won't have to much of a hard time with this one, but everything does count.

This week, you girls will once again go to your "favorite" spot, and you will have to write a 100 word or more "story" to it. Describing what happened before the shot took place, when the shot took place, and what happened after the shot.

Here is a short example of something I'm talking about.



"Sebastian‘s piercing hazel eyes glare into the afternoon sun; scouring the Tyrian distance in hopes to find an unhuman silhouette. His golden threaded gloves grip tightly into his already clenched arms, daring any unwelcome Charr to approach his once glorious city of Ascalon. The Charr have destroyed everything in one great assault. Stripped of his family’s fortune but not his pride or patriotism, he vows to return his beloved Ascalon to its former glory. As an ambassador with mesmerizing influence, Sebastian helped Ascalon reach the pinnacle of humanity and wealth for all of Tyria. He stands firm in his resolve, surrounded by suffocating clay dust that whispers of what was once a beautiful lush garden only to be hushed by the dry gusts of wind. A sole flame on the great wall of the outer city burns small but brightly even outshining the sun; never to give up the chance to guide lost souls back to their home. He awaits the Charr with a vengeant heart, impatient to repay the destroyers of his beloved city. The red angry sky reflects his burning frustration to return to a utopia that is ever so out of his gloved reach."


So, to clear it up. You are to take a shot of your favorite spot in the game, and tell us a story on it. Yes, it has to be detailed enough that the judges can see the image BEFORE they see the image.

I will be only giving the story to the judges and after they rate these stories, I will give them the image itself. Then they can compare how well the story was written to the image, and if they could vision your story similarly to the image, then you know you've done it right.

This week will have 2 scores per person, per judge. One being the story before the image was seen, second how well the judge thought your story matched the image. This one is tough, and will require for your artistic writing to be a skill you hone in on.

If you have any questions, feel free to e-mail me, or contact me in game if I am online. You'll have more luck with e-mail.

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- Your favorite spot. (Doesn't have to be the one you gave us in your Application shot.)
- You must be in it, of course showing an action to go along with the story.
- No image editing. (Cropping allowed)

This Assignment will be due, Saturday, October 28th 11:59PM GMT +5.

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Old Oct 21, 2007, 09:57 PM // 21:57   #303
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Dang, an easy one. Wish I got eliminated after that one. But ah well, I think in the beginning I was more motivated and everything to do well (also, it was before school started up again) but then I guess I didn't realize how much MORE thought and work it was going to be, and my mind got all mushy. Congrats to those of you still there, i'll still be watching on the sidelines!
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Old Oct 21, 2007, 10:44 PM // 22:44   #304
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WOW omg this is going to have my brain analyzing for a while can u see the steam coming from my head???

Thank you so much for the very kind comment Silhouette! We all appreciate the encouragement, especially when it's getting harder and the judges have to critique harder I really would love to keep getting better and better, who knows maybe I can win immunity this week and be the judges' fav picture I certainly am making it my goal...good luck to all with this assignment!

Eryn, I think it was great you commented on why you shot what u shot - because Geishe's insight was super helpful and extremely valuable...wow Geishe ty for taking the time to say all that! I am DEFINATELY taking notes on that!
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Old Oct 22, 2007, 06:45 AM // 06:45   #305
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oooh this is gonna be interesting... writing you really want us to get creative in every aspect, hm? well, why not. I've got a lecture on conservation law this afternoon, time enough to think something up
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Old Oct 22, 2007, 08:14 AM // 08:14   #306
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Geishe's feedback there is pretty spot on and all the remaining actor/models (lol) should take note. Your all lucky to have someone willing to take the time to provide that sort of in depth feedback.

Grats to all on another highly successful week, especially Rosemary whose shot was total win imo.

With Sue gone, there are no mes left... makes Jules a sad panda
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Old Oct 22, 2007, 05:16 PM // 17:16   #307
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Nice job everyone! I love this competition. Awesome shots, wish I could do that. lol Maybe I'll even start doing the assignments for fun, they sound so cool!

Good luck to everyone and can't wait to see how it all turns out!

P.S. I loved the fairy tale story but I had no idea who Rumplestiltskin was so I had to look it up. Now it's all coming back to me.
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Old Oct 27, 2007, 12:43 AM // 00:43   #308
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hey queen, it's frodo. this is that avatar :P and gl to all of you with your pictures, most of them are simply astounding!
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Thank you for all your help Frodo! (ac0okiemost3r) I couldn't have done it without you! This next assignment involves writing so I couldda used some tonic jk :P Judges should post our work on Sunday!
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This week, once again, our contestants turned things in a little early, and I bugged the judges enough to get to work early, once again! :P <3 my Judges.

This week was a hard one to do, a lot of reading on the judges parts, and as you all will see, every single one of these girls stepped up their game in their shots, and made this week, harder to judge, then any of the ones we've had so far.

Now I will explain this weeks judgment. I gave all the judges the stories first, without the Shot. They scored it before they received the images, hence the two different comments per judge.


Ashling Fey

Story:

"What a cliché – the country girl lost in the vast sprawl of the city for the first time. That shan't be me, I had told myself as my ship drew into the thick, grey waters alongside the Bejunkan Pier. I am no ignorant foreigner. I am Canthan. This city is my home of homes, though I have yet to set foot amongst its streets.

What a shock to me, then, were the endless stinking Bukdek slums. The noise, the stench; the place is a sheer assault on the senses. I was quite utterly lost in no time at all.

Yet what a treat for the eyes which, at first affronted by the rotting wooden sprawl of the slums, suddenly find rising amongst such squalor the ancient Canthan architecture of Old Kaineng, and the great gold- and jewel-encrusted walls of our Emperor's grand palace.

And yet, how lucky I am, I thought, to have grown up in the lush haven of Shing Jea, where a poor girl is a farm girl and still gets to feel the damp grass beneath her feet, and the clean breeze in her hair; to learn how to survive on her family's kindness and nature's gifts, instead of out of the pockets of a stranger. For all the unexpected beauty of the rich man's city, how different would my life have been had it begun here.

How privileged I am, in fact, to look on this place with an outsider's eyes."

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Judges Comments:

Judge 1:

Story:

I loved this story. The little of it that was there, I wanted to read on! It's more about you though, and not your exact surrounding, or the story of the area. It's more about how Ashling saw it, not how it should be seen in general. That could have been more implemented, but you did choose to go first person, which is a little harder sometimes, but yet great story!

Image:

Ashling is gorgeous in this shot. She has displayed that side of her ever since I saw her application picture. But I felt that her shot could have been better taken, in view of her story.

Judge 2:

Story:

Nice touch by making your story first person, and guiding the reader on her journay through her travels. I really liked your type . of writing style, it kept my attention (which kind of hard to do nowadays). I can really imagine being brought along with Ashling, as if she were a tour guide for Kaineng, retelling her autobiography once more for a fan. I really liked it, it was to subtle and peaceful and I can already have a clear image in my head what the photo is going to be.

Image:

As I said before, you are really good and capturing yourself well with both the colors and the lighting of your surroundings. I loved this picture, and should go with the rest of your outstanding pictures. I knew it was going to be near Kaineng, but I had an idea that it would be either overlooking or within the winding roads of the slums.

Judge 3:

Story:

Very impressive, great detail of the city in comparison to Shing Jea Island. I imagine Ashling all dressed up in Shing Jea Armor, wandering a dull city street. Really, I have nothing to say about the writing.

Image: The picture itself is breathtaking. Very good image with great angle, great cropping and great pose. sadly, from reading your story, I thought that Ashling would be wandering in a much more slummy city area. Great shot, but poor relevance to the story.


Tasha Darke

Story:

"She was tired, she ached and she was running out of arrows. Tasha paused for a minute to gaze over the grassy, fertile hills below, looking for the road and the Charr. The beauty of the waterfall and river nearby, along with the hazy red afternoon sun and the trees in their autumn colours, reminded her of Ascalon before the Searing. Her thoughts flew back to her childhood – her mother’s screams as the Charr rampaged through their home, her father telling her to hide as he grabbed his bow. A shout in the distance brought her back to the present day and the task ahead. She’d run in front of her party of heroes to scout for the road to their destination – Doomlore Shrine.

Her skilled grey eyes searched for a point in the horizon amongst the trees, before tracing the dirt road back toward her. There was a group of Charr approaching, although they seemed to not have noticed her yet in her earthy attire. She smiled. Entertainment was needed and she couldn’t think of anything better than vengeance."

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Judges Comments:

Judge 1:

Story:

The story was interesting. A lot of jumping around, unfinished details. I think if you would have gone a little more detailed in some parts would it have been better, but for this, it's a tad bit to choppy for me.

Image:

Hmm, I didn't see this coming in your story. I don't feel it matches much at all to the story, but I will admit I LOVE the shot. It's gorgeous. This is the Tasha that broke out of her shell, and continues to show better shots then the previous assignment.

Judge 2:

Story:

My Attention was scattered as much as your story was. I think you provided a very rushed scene, but you did very well use such a rushed way of explaining things around you too. I can tell that Tasha would be "busy" with other things during her story, actually I pegged this to happen to you. But I think the story needed to capture much more of Tasha and surroundings in a much better light. Stopping to enjoy the scenery, along with day-dreaming about your childhood...can be very risky when your on a hunt. Thats why it seemed rushed.

Image:

Wow...did you hit the mother load of intense beauty of scenery. This shot is just...wow. I believe you even used this location in another assignment...only in front the waterfall. I guess what sticks...keep it. Although, rereading over your story..I kind of pictured her holding a bow, running, or looking down right blood-thirsty with a vengeance emote like /shakefist or /bored.

Judge 3:

Story:

The first paragraph was scatter brained, and I would have loved more detail for each event that occurs. You spend a sentence describing great ideas, but they're never fulfilled. However, your 2nd paragraph was much more unified, and the last sentence was brilliant.

Image:

GORGEOUS shot. Wow, you're back Tasha. The landscape, the colours, your matching armor. Just breathtaking. You girls really brought your game this week. Sadly, one of the main features of your story was the idea that you were tired and that led to your mind wandering back to memories past. In this picture, you look almost refreshed and almost happy to be there. I would have picked another pose, to show your tired mood.


Queen Kitiara

Story:

"Jagged walls of rubble pierced the amber sky like the swords from the graves of dead warriors; challenging any who threaten their sacred land. No stone was spared in the city of Rinn; all was charred after the devastating Searing. From atop of Horn Hill, a lone warrior stood watch, disgusted with her view. Sent from Nolani Academy, the birthplace of many a great warrior like Kitiara, she was assigned to protect Prince Rurik. “That frikin idiot is going to get me killed” she grumbled. While she whole heartedly agreed with Rurik’s cause; she completely disagreed with his fighting style influenced by General L. Jenkins. She scowled as she looked on the other side of the hill at Prince Rurik flaunting his Fiery Dragon Sword, telling Olias how “Praise be to Dwayna if this works”.

She recalled when her father held her little hand ten years ago, giving her the amulet which she still wore on her forehead as he stood first in line to join Prince Rurik’s cause. She had been raised at Nolani Academy by the seasoned guards of King Adlbern after her father had sacrificed his life while protecting Prince Rurik. An ingenuous ambush led by Bonfaaz Burntfur had mercilessly attacked her father’s small scouting troop. Not to see the end of his dream of a restored Ascalon, her father insisted the prince and his guards flee to safety while he tanked at the last standing gate. Kitiara became orphaned that day. She had lost her mother at birth and had only known a father. Now, not only was her home lost because of the Charr, but her only loved one as well. The escort guards insisted the King allow them to raise her when hearing her father was to never return. It then became no surprise when she learned to wield lightening from her axe whilst being surrounded by the guards and elementalist instructors who taught in the academy. She was hell-bent on avenging her father; and everyone knew if there was a mission involving killing Charr, Kitiara need not to be asked, for she was, like her father, first in line to volunteer.

The rain had begun to fall and pulled Kitiara from her thoughts. Whether her eyes burned from anger or the sulfuric mist in the sky; one could not tell. She turned her face upward, searching the boiling clouds for a blessing from Balthazar to help avenge her father. Her raven black hair clung to her face as the rain fell faster; pelting her cold and rusty embellished armor. But like her armor, Kitiara’s build was strong even though her slender body hid her steely resignation, as if it too was forged by the mighty dwarves of Droknar. She gazed from her vantage point, looking for the shaggy red silhouette of General Bonfaaz. All she saw was the demoralizing crumbling walls, sagging toward its fellow stones as if heartsick to be apart. Even the steep rocks seem to weep as the falling rain soaked its untouched paths, depressed that no child of Rinn was skipping across its shoulders. “Fear not, old city of Rinn. I will walk your streets again. I will walk them now as I pursue this murderer of my father, destroyer of my home. After I have ended his oppression and restore you to glory; I will skip in your streets to remember my once happy childhood.” With one last gaze at a sunless, brooding, sky; Kitiara felt Balthazaar’s Aura bless her spirit. Out of the corner of her eye, a bristly red figure strode across an abandoned courtyard. She scrambled over to her axe as flashes of her father burst into her mind. "You no longer need to send your tears from the heavens Father! For today, I will avenge you!”"

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Judges Comments:

Judge 1: Story:

Long, story, but an awesome read. Even the detail on Kitiara's background was amazing. I honestly can't wait to see the Image attached to this! The story had a great flow to it, and I wanted to continue reading on, even though it was the longest out of all of the stories we received!

Image:

:O................I honestly didn't know what to expect when I read the story. There was so much to it that it was hard to locate 1 still image the whole time. Then when I saw this picture, it summed up the whole story for me. Which is exactly what I was looking for from such a long entry. Good job!

Judge 2:

Story:

Is the Queen continuing her role a "cop"? It was very captivating how you were able to come up with a whole backstory of your character. Much added kudos for that much creativity. Boy was that long, hehe. It was a good read, but I couldn't help but to notice that you had introduced a character just by a name, but never bother to explain exactly who he was. I'm sorry, I'm a bit of a nit-picker when it comes to layout of stories, but you didn't put spaces between your paragraphs. It can pose a problem sometimes, but its not an overall downer on your story. Just something you need to look out for. Other wise good read, and I applaud your creativity.

Image:

Wow, you surprised me here, Kitara. I kept thinking that this picture just wouldn't be the same with out the sorrow effect of the rain that you explained in your story. I had completely forgotten this place. I love it, and I love this pose that you used to show what emotional pain Kitara is going through from all her lost. The cometary in the shot is not bad either. Wished it was a tad wider, but loved it.

Judge 3:

Story:

Long, gosh, but nice read. This story sets up some high expectations for your image. In terms of mistake: "After I have ended his oppression and restore you to glory..." just some grammatical glitches.

Should either be" After I end his oppression and restore you to glory.." OR
"After I have ended his oppression and restored you to glory..."

Overall, great job.

Image:

Perfect match from story to picture. I believe you nailed the translation from story to shot. One thing that got me worrying was that your armor was going to get rusty! You nailed this assignment.


Rosemary Marron

Story:

"Her feet made loud thudding sounds as they pounded on the forest floor. At first she thought the sounds were made by her pursuers, but as soon as she noticed that they were her own she came to a halt, listening to her surroundings in a panic. The forest was quiet – only the birds sang in the trees, which was a good sign. Taking a deep breath to try to calm her shattered nerves, she continued her way more silently and carefully. Her camouflage outfit was enough to conceal visibly, but it would do nothing if the raptors heard her.
The bridge loomed ahead of her, and with it the promise of safety. She had never meant to go that far into the forest with the hunting group, but they had needed a healer. In the end her presence hadn't made a difference. There was something else in the woods, something even the hunters didn't know how to deal with.

They were all dead.

Now her feet pounded over the wooden boards of the bridge. This time, the loud creaking sound was welcomed rather than something feared. She ran more confidently, panic subsiding in the face of hope. From the bridge she could see her village, and the familiar faces of people who were turning to look in her direction quizzically. There would be endless questions and tears shed for the lost ones. Still, for this one moment, she could feel elation for simply managing to stay alive."

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Judges Comments:

Judge 1:

Story:

Adventure story! I love it, I probably spent more time trying to imagine the picture then fully paying attention to the writing. I see Rose, running across the land, or the bridge, one of the two, with a teary look on her face, as she runs toward her village! Good read, wish there was more to it though.

Image:

Yay! Almost like I had pictured, aside from the fact that I realized you can't really have a sad facial expression, ah well. Although I did think maybe being able to see some of the corpses of those hunters scattered about, because surely, some would have ran with you as you ran, and died as whatever attacked them got them on the run.

Judge 2:

Story:

I really fell in to your story, and loved every second that I read of it. Oh, how I wish there was more. Rosemary sure plays a really good victim, and much believable that a healer would be the last one alive. Your story speaks to alot of people because it relates to Guild Wars fans alike. So you captured readers instantly and let them sink in and feel what Rosemary was thinking. I believe I even have an idea where this location is.

Image:

I fallen in love with this picture. I love the colors and the overall flow of the whole picture. The angle is great, and works well with the over view of the bridge. I know you can't help the look on Rosemary's face, frightened is not an option we can use sadly. But you got the point a cross. You used a scene from your story, using the bridge, obviously showing you were running for your life.

Judge 3:

Story:

Simple yet effective. Not my particular favourite for there were some awkward sentences. For example: "Her camouflage outfit was enough to conceal visibly..." for two reasons. visibly I felt was a poor word choice, for camouflage outfit already explains that you are invisible. It was just a very obvious and unnecessary description.

Image:

This is, again, a very nice shot. You all have improved so much, its astounding. I like how the bridge in the story is clearly seen here. And Rosemary does look scared and in a panic. However, I believe the armor really doesn't look like a camouflage outfit whatsoever. So many danglies, and so many colorful patterns really doesn't suggest a camouflaged person. I would think something dark like Kurzicks dyed green would look more reconnaissance than the asuran.


Eryn Shadowbane

Story:

"Though barely past noon, the weak sun cast but a deceptive, fleeting light over the vast, bleak ridges of the Poisonous Outcrops. This far in the north, Abaddon’s dark clutch was almost physically tangible, defying the otherwise supreme reign of Elona’s sun. The continuous battle of day and night plunged the region into perpetual twilight, occasionally broken only by vicious flashes of green where Abaddon’s poison prevailed over the seemingly impenetrable black rock. A haunt of the undead. A haunt of demons.

Eryn had long since given up wondering why time upon time she felt drawn to this forbidding place. Brought up by the Sunspears, Eryn had never known her parents. The order had educated her, trained her to fight darkness and injustice and had christianed her with a surname they felt would plant fear into the hearts of their enemies. Yet deep inside her something powerful lurked in sinister silence, always watching, barely on the brink of awareness. A dark stigma that clung to her, setting her apart from others, inspiring dark dreams and dark moods. A stigma that had scared her in the past but that she had long since come to accept. A stigma that time upon time pulled her to this place like an invisible force, making her wander eerie paths, the cold shadows that stain her spotless armor reflections of her troubled mind."

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Judges Comments:

Judge 1:Story:

I felt that you tried too hard in writing your story. A little over the top in using adjectives, but yet creative in it's own way. I assume the picture to this story will be much like the submission you gave us in your application, dark place near Abaddon.

Picture:

As suspected, same place! You described it well enough then. The background in the picture looks a bit different from your application though. The moon adds some well placed lighting, but I felt that it didn't quite cut your story, maybe more could have been added to it, the story that is.

Judge 2:

Story:

Wow. You sure brought out your descriptive and creative side with this post. The first paragraph, I really fell into and loved the metaphors you used, which I'm guessing, for your background of both your character and your picture. It really sets the mood, and what I read from it is...mysterious and ominous. So not only is Eryn a beauty she seems to be plagued by something..Abaddon?...her past?...boogie monsters? Who knows? I am a fan of a descriptive setting, it really makes me understand the situation at hand, but I can also see it as a problem for others too. Which can make it seem too wordy.

Image:

Ha! I knew exactly where you were going to shoot at for your picture, and I couldn't of been more pleased with the outcome. Its beautiful with a subtle hint of mystery, and the terror surroundings that was explained in your story. I thought this fit perfectly with your story.

Judge 3:

Story:

Extremely Wordy, and unnecessarily so. The juxtaposition of a paragon harboring a dark secret is interesting, and I definitely feel as if Eryn is some kind of dark angel. In terms of mistakes:

"forbiding place..." = Forbidden place
"Chrisianed..." = Christened
"scared her in the past..." = scarred
"... her spotless armor reflections of her troubled mind." = grammatically incorrect, should be "... her spotless armor are reflections of her troubled mind."

Image: Stunning. The Angle is gorgeous, the moon is sooo beautiful, and just wow, I am impressed. You look menacing and dark like your story suggests, and I think this shot may have saved your tooshie. I absolutely love the dark feel this shows.


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ZOMG AWESOME JOB GIRLS!!! Sheesh I was soooo hoping to shoot for Immunity...now I'm just ....scaredandhonoredtobewithyouall

/runs off and prays to fight another day! EEK!
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This weeks shots, as you all can see, where very good. You will also soon see that the judges will slowly start to form different opinions for contestants now, as the numbers slowly dwindle down. The end is so close, it's almost scarce how fast this has gone by, but for now, we shall show you, which of these ladies, continues on to the top 4.

Scoring:

The judges where told to score each story separate from the image, thusly giving each judge 2 different things to score. So this week, we have 3 sets of numbers to present to you.

The first set is the scores for the stories from each judge with their totals, the second set will be from the image, and how well it matched to the story. The third, and final score is the compilation of the two previous scores added together, this is the one that counts!

So, here we go with the scores!

Story:

Eryn Shadowbane: 1 + 2 + 1 = 4
Tasha Darke: 2 + 1 + 2 = 5
Rosemary Marron: 4 + 5 + 3 = 12
Ashling Fey: 3 + 4 + 5 = 12
Queen Kitiara: 5 + 3 + 4 = 12

Image:

Tasha Darke: 2 + 1 + 2 = 5
Ashling Fey: 3 + 2 + 1 = 6
Eryn Shadowbane: 1 + 3 + + 4 = 8
Rosemary Marron: 4 + 4 + 3 = 11
Queen Kitiara: 5 + 5 + 5 = 15

Total:

Tasha Darke: 5 + 5 = 10(UP FOR ELIMINATION)
Eryn Shadowbane: 4 + 8 = 12(UP FOR ELIMINATION)

Ashling Fey: 12 + 6 = 18

Rosemary Marron: 12 + 11 = 23(UP FOR IMMUNITY)
Queen Kitiara: 12 + 15 = 27(UP FOR IMMUNITY)


Current Immunity holder:

Rosemary, you have lost your immunity to the persona that we felt did the best on this weeks assignment. You did well, and we hope to see you continue your rise to the top, and into the final three!

Eliminatees:

Tasha Darke: You came from a slump back when we first started, then you turned yourself around, and have kept yourself at a wonderful pace. This week, we felt that your story did not match your image, all though we felt that your image was one of the best you've ever given us.

Eryn Shadowbane: You've lingered along the bottom of this competition a couple times. We've noticed you like to stay in the same type of "style" in your shots that we've seen up till this point.

This weeks elimination will be tough needless to say. We have 2 strong competitors, but one must go.

Immunityees:

Rosemary Marron: You once again have shown yourself in the top 2. Congratulations for keeping yourself in the top when the scores really start to count. We hope to see more great performances.

Queen Kitiara: Once again you are here, fighting for immunity. You've been in this position three times, counting today, and you've yet to receive a week of immunity, yet you still show us your hard work every week. My only feat I feel you've accomplished thus far is, I wish everyone els would put as much effort into this, as I've seen you do! This competition would be a lot harder if it was so!


Now for the elimination:

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And the Immunity Winner:





Congratulations girls, top 4. You should be proud of yourselves. As I've always said, it only gets harder from here on out, so don't get to high on your horse, and keep on your toes!

Next assignment to be posted within 24 hours.
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Old Oct 28, 2007, 06:04 AM // 06:04   #313
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whoa, awesome job everyone! kitiara, yours was just amazing, loved the story the picture was perfect
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haha, nolani academy...its been so long since i did that mission....those were good times hehe

go kitiara and congrats! i'm cheering for you
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Old Oct 28, 2007, 06:33 AM // 06:33   #314
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Congratulations Kitiara! *hug* You really deserved it this round, your shot and story were just amazing.

Eryn, sad to see you go. Your story somehow made me think of Lovecraftian tales and it was quite interestingly written. I was so expecting to see the word "gibbous" in there somewhere. Or "primordial". I hope you continue to post here or in the outtakes thread, it'd be sad to not see any more wonderful para shots.

Huh, this contest is getting really fierce. Each week I find myself praying that I don't get eliminated, even though I'm personally happy with the shot choices I've made throughout the contest.
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Old Oct 28, 2007, 08:11 AM // 08:11   #315
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whew. out. even though I'm a little sad that I had to go after this assignment, because I really loved it, I have to admit that I will not miss all the hard work and the nervous waiting for results more time for real playing again I'm proud I got this far, and I wish you all the best! it was a wonderful competition and it was a great lot of fun apart from teaching me/us how to make better screenshots

congrats Kitiara, great job. but then, everybody did a great job, I think (and I include myself here cuz no matter what you're gonna say, I still very much like my story )
congrats to Tasha for staying in, give them hell from me





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Old Oct 28, 2007, 09:53 AM // 09:53   #316
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I loved your shots SO much Eryn, the judges must have had a hard time with this, especially with Tasha being part of the formula. I truly miss you! I totally had you pinned for Top 3 >.<

And girlies... psychic powers tell me you all better suit up for this next assignment. I think you'll all be fine with such fine screenshot taking skills and writing skills... but I sense a massive assignment this week that would easily eclipse this weeks in mere size.
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Oops, I guess I should have submitted something more like this one
My bad.

Great stuff from everyone this week - I'm getting really nervous about the next assignment now

And Eryn - so sad to see you go! Had so much fun working with you - I hope you'll continue to post your pictures =]
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Old Oct 28, 2007, 12:30 PM // 12:30   #318
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congrats Kitiara i know how hard u were working on this assignment it has really paid off for u

Eryn i am sad to see u go u were one of my fav's GO PARAGONS :P
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Sad to see you go Eryn, and congrats to Kitiara for the shot and the story.

I have to say I'm in the same boat as you Peryenne - hoping that I don't get eliminated, wondering after I've sent that email what I could have done differently even though I'm happy with the shot.

Its stange though, it seems like things go two ways for me - either I read the assignment, know the shot I want to take and get complimented on it, or I'm left with a feeling of foreboding and spend all week searching for something I'm happy with. This week's was very much half and half - I knew the shot, but the story wasn't there. I'll post a previous draft of the story in the outtakes thread which I personally preferred, but didn't fulfil the requirements set.

Here's hoping for next week.
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Old Oct 28, 2007, 02:57 PM // 14:57   #320
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WAHOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!

Omg thank you judges and guys thank you so much for all the well wishes!!!

I was like a hyper little kid running around in glee till 4:30 am I think it was...so elated and excited to do well amongst some seriously great shots! I can't tell you how my emotions rollercoastered from hopeful to attaining immunity to hopeful I'd stay another week lol! I couldn't have gotten there without some wonderful encouragement and Perynne I'm blown away by how classy you are offering me a hug right away after you worked so hard on your assignment!

Eryn, I'm glad you are not down on yourself because your submission was beautiful It truly is going to be sad not to see your beautiful paragon next week!

I am TOTALLY heeding Geishe's psychic powers this week...even the results were saying not to get on a high horse and I already planned on working hard...lawl - I went farming right after the results cuz I need money for possibly armor needs next week ha haha! (I'm the proud owner of 2k) I'm gonna keep working hard! There is no way I would dishonor anyone by slacking just cuz I have immunity, it makes me want to try and get it again : I gotta prove I deserve to be here!
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